You are about to enter the “Making Sense of My Identity” collection. Strong finished essay: Sharing an identity or background I’ve respected the word count, remaining within 10% of the upper word limit.I’ve included self-reflection and insight in my essay.My essay is focused on me, not another person or thing.I’ve demonstrated my positive traits and values in my essay.I’ve used specific, vivid personal stories that would be hard to replicate.I’ve used appropriate style and tone for a college essay.
Weak rough draft: Sharing an identity or background She draws a specific personal insight from each memory and uses the stories to demonstrate her qualities and values. In the final version, the student uses an extended metaphor of a museum to create a strong connection among her stories, each showcasing a different part of her identity.
In the weak rough draft, there is little connection between the individual anecdotes, and they do not robustly demonstrate the student’s qualities. The writer builds her essay around the theme of the five senses, sharing memories she associates with sight, sound, smell, touch, and taste. This essay uses a montage structure to show snapshots of a student’s identity and background. Frequently asked questions about college application essaysĮssay 1: Sharing an identity or background through a montage.Essay 3: Showing the influence of an important person or thing.Essay 2: Overcoming a challenge, a sports injury narrative.Essay 1: Sharing an identity or background through a montage.